UseTransitionsPurposefully
•First,Second,Third，Finallymakesforaboringpersonalstatement!
•Try varying your transitions，like
•For the past severalyears
•After conducting my research，discovered..
•Although丨enjoyed studying X,Yengageda,b,cSkills
•Several factors influenced my shifting careerg oals.First,Next,etc.
•Many fascinating books described generation，but X inspired me
simile
v+like+n
as+adj+as+n
common animals
simile :dog,bee,fox,lamb,mule,bat,snail,eel,owl,
metaphors are imaginative way to discribe sth by comparing sth to other thing.
personification
The second essay is clearer in the logic construction.First，both of they have a topic sentence which is expressed clearly.The second one grasps the coherences well.Therefore,its facts and support details can be well divided.It's easier for reader to understand.
- 三个元素：主旨句unity，支持句support，结合句coherence
- how to achieve unity?
- it contains two parts : a topic and a controlling idea
- neither too broad nor too narraw
- how to achieve support?
- more hard than unity
- opinion, facts but needs proof, specific supporting detail
- how to achieve coherence?
- using consistent pronouns
- using transitional signals (traffic signs) to link ideas
- repeating key nouns
- arranging ideas in a logical order. "transition"
- all in all, it should echo the opening, summarize well and enlighten the readers.
- reference !
- diagram?
