Homework
Thesis statement: Technology is isolating us
The first topic sentence: Entertainment is one area
Support 1: Addictive computer games
Support 2: Frequent social networking
The second topic sentence: Education is another area
Support 1: Information barrier
Support 2: Excessive copyright protection
Closing: We are being isolated by technology.
Writing Process
- Prewriting
- Writing the first draft
- Revising
- Editing
1.prewriting
- listing(free listing-selective listing)
- clustering /diagramming
- outlining(thesis statement+selective evidence)
outlining at essay level
- set your first draft aside for a while
- work from typed or printed text rather than from your own familiar handwriting
- read your draft aloud
- add your written comments above the lines
Is my essay unified?
- Do I have a thesis that is clearly stated or implied in the introductory paragraph of my essay?
- Do all my supporting paragraphs truly support and back up my thesis?
Is my essay supported?
- Are there two or three separate supporting points for the thesis?
- Do I have specific evidence for each of the supporting points?
- Is there plenty of specific evidence for each supporting point?
Is my essay organized?
- Do I have an interesting introduction,a solid conclusion,and an accurate title?
- Do I have a clear method of organizing my essay?
- Do I use transitions and other connecting words?
(3)revising sentences
- Do I use parallelism to balance my words and ideas?
- Do I have a consistent point of view?
- use specific words ?
- Do I use active verbs ?
- Do I use words effectively by avoiding slang,cliches,pretentious language,and wordiness ?
- Do I vary my sentences ?
- grammar
- punctuation
- capitalization
- sentence structure
- word usage
- spelling
writing skills
pre writing 1.slective list 2.draw a diagram 3.out line :thesis atatement
WritingSteps
1.Free Listing
2.Select Listing
3.Cluster(group things together)
4.Outlining at an essay level
5.Revising
Homework Task
Technology is isolating us
1. entertainment
--computer/online games
--individual KTV
2. education
--online lessons
--e-books
Closing: We are alone.
Prepare
Free listing (and select)
——Whatever in mind
Diagramming
——Subtopics
Outline
——With simple facts and ideas
Practice
The amount of privacy is little
--a. Sharing public place with others (unrelated) make phone calls
--b. Not able to change your clothes any time you want
--c. Everyone can watch your private belongings
Revising DRAFT
a. not revise immediately finished
b. type it
c. read loud
d. comments for the drafts
Revising CONTENTS
unified--supportes--organized
